Unexpected, neat
I found your movie is 'cause I was interested to see what score was required for a daily tenth nowadays, so my view was more luck than anything. The description got my attention though, otherwise I'd've just left the page.
I really liked the creativity you put into it, and watched the entire movie. Your humour is certainly in the right place with good timing. I like the noir style you chose as well. One noticable weakness is your microphone. I could hear it crackling from time to time, which means you were probably too close. Use a program like Audacity to record, preview and edit your voice clips. The absense of the mug impact sound effect was missed, it'd help the slapstick.
All in all, a solid showing. Next time you might want to add in some background music. Don't worry, Flash will be able to compress it so that it doesn't hurt your small (and appreciated) file size.
Great work!